How many times I wrote your name. Many in a row, quickly, or only one, marking the good characters. Or even great on a torn piece of parchment, and then analyze it, look like the path L and U and N and A.
How many times have I cut your surname. LO VE GO OD. Infinitely long, but so simple that you'll never forget. And then also LOVE GOOD. So it's even better. It 's your flag. The Good. All we can be good.
GOOD. Do not we, the good ? Harry and Dumbledore and the other, of course. But so do we. You and I .
And what about your name, then? Short and simple, even more than mine. The R and O and N. So easy to write ...
It 'so nice to write.
Maybe your last name is more complicated. Weasley. But the few times I went to the house of a Weasley - at Shell Cottage, remember? - I saw a great sense of peace. Perhaps it is the last name to bring it into being, but you're the biggest part, Ron. RO N
I'll never understand how he can please you. But as far as I am stupid, sloppy, the worst of the Weasley family ...
And what I'm strange moody and antisocial ...
S to p p i c h and the or
T the to m or
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8 classified as: Tamina - name
Originality: 8 / 10
The Moon / Ron are quite unusual, so it's quite easy to write something different. It was pretty much the whole idea of focusing on the name Fic:)
Grammatical : 8 / 10
Everything ok here. No typo, grammar and the like. I'll make a small error of inattention: you wrote "And so beautiful ..." instead of "It's so beautiful ..." and some repetition here and there.
Style: 8 / 10 Overall
is smooth and relaxed. The sentences are not very elaborate, but nothing serious; D staff
Rating: 8 / 10
is pretty, and it would have been even more if I wish I had added some missing moment. I really liked the last part, where you have to understand that two boys in the lurch, who met and complement each other:)
character IC: 5 / 5
Overall score: 37 / 45
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